This email is only for the members of Group 1 involved in Scene 18: Monica Merelli, Claudia Nicolosi, Anita Paganini, Camilla Baragetti.
First of all, congratulation for your great work with this very long Scene. Below you can read my feedback:
- Start the Scene with the shots of the parrots, at seconds 3-7. You can remove the first shot in which Florinda is not present.
- The second shot should show Etewa firing at the parrots. Remove the intermediate shot with Parrots flying down at seconds 7-8.
- Remove the seconds 13-14, in which you see the dead parrot walking
- Remove the shots at seconds 15-21
- At second 50, replace the word "hekuras" with the word "spirits"
- At second 54, slow down speed so that Ritimi has enough time to say: "Tonight I dreamt we were bathing in a waterfall"
- Remove the shot at seconds 57-59.
- Remove seconds 1:05-1:09
- Remove seconds 1:13-1:17
- Remove seconds 1:20-1:22
- Seconds 1:28 : just before saying "and there is our Shabono", Etewa also says: "There is the great river Orinoco, where the white man passes"
- The shot starting at 1:33 should start from the last frame of the previous shot and using the templates of Etewa, Ritimi and Florinda. Swap their dialogues: Ritimi says: "You have been quiet for a long time", and Florinda answers: "I feel happy here. I simply stopped thinking about my problems, because they are meaningless in the jungle. I have learned to live in the present". Then, Ritimi ends the Scene with this line of dialogue: "One day I will gather firewood and you will no longer be by my side. But I will not be sad, because this afternoon we saw a flock of parrots chasing the setting sun.